Comments on: Chapter Six: Doughnuts, Winter and Mirror

By: Erhannis

Erhannis — Thu, 19 Aug 2010 21:58:16 +0000

Just two typos I found, this time.

“Oh dear. How did I know it would be was you, Adol?”
“Oh dear. How did I know it would be [or just was] you, Adol?”

“The Admiral’s ma’am.”
“The Admiral’s, ma’am.”

Good work! Thanks for the story!

By: The Origic Codex

The Origic Codex — Wed, 18 Aug 2010 14:53:37 +0000

Kanasu, that made my day. The Doctor is one of my favorite characters of all time. I’m really pleased that the banner at Gunnerkrigg is working!

By: The Origic Codex

The Origic Codex — Wed, 18 Aug 2010 14:52:39 +0000

The work of a hero (don’t let Valentine hear you call him that) is never over. I have trouble getting through my to-do list at work!

By: Kanasu

Kanasu — Wed, 18 Aug 2010 06:08:01 +0000

Wonderful story, just disovered it today thanks to a banner ad at Gunnerkrigg. I can’t help but notice that Elijah heavily reminds me of The Doctor.

By: daymon34

daymon34 — Tue, 17 Aug 2010 17:53:20 +0000

That to do list just keeps growing, so now the demons need a way home and have come asking for help. I wonder if they can help with building the device, at least then he will not have to tell many normals secrets just yet.

Though I can see several goverments objecting to have other people working on a sensative project. If only they knew they weren’t human.

By: Update 8/17 | Last Mage

Update 8/17 | Last Mage — Tue, 17 Aug 2010 13:37:20 +0000

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By: The Origic Codex

The Origic Codex — Mon, 16 Aug 2010 19:29:47 +0000

Excellent catch, thanks! Also, I’m immensely pleased that you’re enjoying the story!

By: nerdsamwich

nerdsamwich — Sun, 15 Aug 2010 18:26:02 +0000

Part one has a perspective disagreement in the paragraph beginning, “The blossom shuddered visibly”. Valentine is referred to in that paragraph as “he” instead of “I”. Other than that, great story! Keep up the good work!

By: Update (8/10) | Last Mage

Update (8/10) | Last Mage — Fri, 13 Aug 2010 13:13:24 +0000

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By: The Origic Codex

The Origic Codex — Thu, 05 Aug 2010 18:42:57 +0000

Humans see the opportunity in things they perceive as power or an advantage. There is more to this aspect of the story and I look forward to exploring it.